I've gotta agree with mindfeck on this. Also, it reminds me too much of a bad romance novel with a rich woman bragging about trips to Italy or something. Don't like it at all.

my first read of the line...clenched like a fist and opened like a star....got it felt it understood it..more importantly felt it...you sound jaded and sexless Mindfeck

oof. clenched like a fist and then opened like a star? this excerpt is a 7 car pile-up of clumsy metaphors.