Very nice. Loved the "or nots". You have a way with words and I am very sure I am not the first person to tell you that. Surprise me, if you dare, and come to my show closing party on Sunday at 3.
--JG
04/11 |
haha, my name is anna, but it was it was strange to read something that was so beautifully real, but not me at all, at least maybe not.
--anna
04/06 |
Finally someone gets it. I've been Anna for 2 years now and i'm only 18. I've never identified with a character more. I saw her power in her vulnerability. She isn't typical at all. Thank you so much for this, I really needed some support and I got it from her.
--ES
04/05 |
Wow.
Thank you. As a not-so-machismo black male, I crave writing like this that is so consistant with the overall tone of Nerve.com.
Also I must confess, I havent gotten lucky for over six months. The emotions revealed in this piece really strike home to me right now.
Thanks for allowing me to get lucky vicariously through your writing. It is the reciprocal induction of pleasure and stimulus that really gets my motor running. I cant have any fun unless she is having fun, who ever she happens to be at the time.
--dkg
04/02 |
This is an amazing story. Thanks.
--acd
03/28 |
Awesome. Pace like a boat ride and details that satisfied like a six course meal.
I loved it.
--~Abv
03/24 |
Beautiful poetry. A seductive and luxurious night meeting, and yet in a strange way... romantic and a bit sad. Loved it!
--aon
03/23 |
Knee weakening. Can relate more than 150%. More inspiration for my own stories about all of the "little/big" things.The way the smallest details can say so much and the way some things so big can mean very little.Love knowing that it's all about her, even if she resembles some of the souls, heartless, without sex and love, that one may want to cradle in a tightly wound Sex and Love Addicts Anonymous meeting. So,I'm not the only one...even if she is just a charachter you've dreamt up.I am glad I no longer have to wonder whether I am the only one who gives "me" kisses goodnight.And aside from a little outright fucking every so often, just to keep myself interested in me,I'm as "normal" as this figment of your imagination.And intend to stay that way and know it's all okay...Thanks.(Sorry to go on.)It really is a great story..
--cmr
04/27 |
this captured -in a torrent of overflowing images - exactly what it is like to be a woman gloriously lost in the act.. great piece! I held my breath until it's bittersweet end..
--dg
03/23 |
glorious, lovely, beautiful.
--vm
03/23 |
gives me goosebumps. i've been anna. a couple of years ago.
now, i've found love.
--n
03/23 |
I liked this. I liked the loneliness pervading the whole story. Itīs a perfect description of how a one-night-stand can remind you of all the others and making it impossible to savour the moment. Donīt think Anna is all that strong either. A "big girl" thatīs so lost she canīt go home nor stay with Clive.
--eva
03/18 |
Damn. Damndamndamndamndamn. That was so rock.
--am
03/17 |
very beautiful, exactly as written.
i'm slightly confused by the other feedback. i don't see anna as powerful at all. sex seems to be the only place she finds herself not lonely and uncomfortable. clearly, she's unhappy in that body. once uncoupled, her *strength* melts away.
trying to fill an empty spot with sex only works for a little while - it's brief and random unless you find a real partner. when this spot is as empty as anna's seems to be, it's bittersweet. the time between encounters seems long and frightening. i'm deeply impressed that the author "caught" this. very moving. thank you.
--kay
03/14 |
this piece is beautiful.. i can hear the breaths, the sighs.. and feel the temperatures described.
my favorite part is when anna looks into the mirror - lips fresh from kissing, tasting.. and hair perfectly out of place. she's half-naked, but definitely still warm from rapid blood flow.. and it's a complete moment of clarity. beautiful, powerful woman!
i loved it!!
--led
03/13 |
i loved this! awesome writing.
--bed
03/13 |
great writing!
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03/13 |
Interesting. I like the way the sory plays about, concentrated on the topic in some places and seemingly lost in escatsy in some places. Anna though seems to be a character we've seen too many times. Perhaps a more orignal central character for the nextt one?
--AAA
03/13 |
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