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Reader Feedback on "Alfie and Joe"
i came on this piece trying to find a coffee shop in murfreesboro. funny how that works. i guess my feedback would be this: so what? it is obvious that the author was shaken, and she tells a good story. people are shaken, broken, everyday, and if they cannot talk about that, they are mute. It seems like the writer here has just thought longer about the turns of phrase. is that literature (is there such a thing?) quoting THE most obvious of all henry miller books, and from within the first twenty five pages, doesn't make this story work. still, with only a page and a half to work with, not SO bad. i read it and was embarrassed. not because of my own sexual inhibitions, but for the ultimate repression of the writer: miller is about flows and desire. reread him. he does not seek a godlike power, and that you ascribe godlike power to your 'lover' disturbs me. i guess i'm done now. by the way, the internet has some great maps of murphreesboro, if you need one
--ss
07/07 |
Your pace, texture, and the suprises of your writing coupled to my recogntion of the not so implicit tongue language mameh-loshen makes me agree with Joseph you are a regular goddaamit of a writer.
--AH
12/10 |
kinda makes you wanna fuck and stay fucked...
--ls
11/27 |
Yes, you are a writer.
--rw
10/19 |
LisaJo: is one of Deb's gems from nerve.com
--sbd
10/14 |
Is it possible for anyone to be more self absorbed than the author of this piece? It seems as if the South must be a stage populated by bit players straight out of Central Casting as backdrop for the author's "hornier than thou" desire. I suggest that Ms. Margolin, if her work is ever to have any meaning, view her fellow humans and her pseudo-ficitonal characters more as people and less like hackneyed props. Just imagine, two wandering, literary, Jews wordlessly consumating their shared white-hot desire outside a pre-Dawn Nashville coffee shop. And you had Isaac Bahevis Singer in common too! Isn't life grand and mysterious, you pretty little, Nihilistic, thing?
--dw
10/07 |
Wow. This piece really shocked me because i was thinking (i swear it) into the second paragraph that Deb sounds like henry miller, and then, from below the horizon of the screen comes his name, embedded in the html... i like this one a lot, especially as a southerner and former (...ahem...) speed-freak who has spent many hours (and met many people) in all-nighters... very nice...
--toby
10/06 |
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