Very odd. The author certainly lives in a world of smells. Good snapshots of persons in the lower strata of society. There is a surreal quality to the language that I find intriguing. It is also erotic in a more realistic way than fantasies set in the upper class (ho hum). Would like to check out more of this author. Wonder if she publishes in ebooks?
--JFB
10/26 |
Wonderful, rich, evocative. Thank you.
--HK
10/20 |
thank you for letting this gift be posted.
your story of quantum entanglments was a pleasure of unexpected depth. don't often see the real deal on a web page.
woman. your writing hurts good.
whatever is is that cuts a very few scriveners outta the pack you've got it.
regards
ehill@world.std.com
--eh
10/20 |
Bleak and depressing, ugh.... The author took a pathetic and unappealing subject, added some olfactory unpleasantness, and forgot to edit out the redundancies. I'm sure there are weak and sad people out there living in passive misery and making wrong choices, with no self-respect, goals, or moral fibre to hold them up. But why write about the lives of slugs? When 19th- and early 20th- century writers focused on the life of the little man they did so to highlight a larger ugliness and injustice in the society that produced, then deformed or destroyed the protagonist. (For an example, see Gogol's Overcoat, or Flaubert's Madame Bovary, or even Dreiser's Sister Carrie.) Those stories were subversive. They alerted and alarmed the reader, shook her out of her complacency, exhorted her to hold on to her humanity and strive for something worthwhile despite conventions and circumstances. And what has a story like Quantum Physics accomplished, besides making me feel as if I'd spent a day lying under Timmy's bed, surrounded by stale smells, hair, lint, and a dirty towel? Ms. Power's skill was wasted on this one.
-Jules (alloralogos@nerve)
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10/20 |
Excellent. There were at least a dozen precious turns-of-phrase in this story. I love the writing style (though I did feel the writing was a bit stilted in section 1)... The description of smells "his breath, his body, smells uncomplicated and new" very literary and strong. Three paragraphs are just marvelously written: "It occurs to her that retrospection ...", Terry's theme of light, and "Someone, somewhere". marvelous. The music "like drifting up from a campsite" is a great image. And both "I have to get something, she says. You can come in and play with my cat." and the "masturbatory reservoir" are phrases that gave me a sparkle of delight (though admittedly in a beavis and butthead sort of way). This is the best writing Nerve has posted in a long while.
--NK
10/16 |
deeply touched. moved beyond where words could really explain. thanks.
--rl
10/16 |
i felt that this story is true to the aspect of not letting go. she took this boy because he reminded her of her husband and that left her lonely. this was a great tale on how human beings act upon instinct rather than a rational way.
--tec_
10/16 |
Beautiful. This is just lovely and wonderful. Thank you.
--g
10/16 |
rich story and no bracket notation.
--tca
10/16 |
Goddamn, I wanna cry... That is so splendidly sad... Yet pretty..
--GC
10/16 |
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