The thing that strikes me the most about your writing is how conversational and immediate it is. I really connect with it because it reminds me some of my own style. You've got some really fabulous turns of phrases as well. I love the thing about Eli and the lack of punctuation as a political statement. The part about the husband who won't let her go to New York and saw her as a problem to solve and solved her, makes me so sad and makes me think of my last relationship and how I could have become a problem he solved, instead of me. The entire story was so real and wonderfully evocative. Thank you.
--ZW
09/18 |
EXCELLENT story, thank you. It's great to read a threesome story with two guys and a girl.
To the poster who commented on the writer's husband: the writer is the writer, not necessarily the subject, this IS fiction after all.
--ga
09/18 |
Great story, but I hope it's worth publicly selling your husband down the river.
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09/04 |
This got published?
--kp
08/30 |
Jami, that was smokin' hot. Thanks for the ride
--mr
08/29 |
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