this is really genious. I've been on these kinds of retreats and i love how this story is taking stabs at the pretention, but kind of embracing it and using it as well. after you aknowledged the pretention of it all, then you are sort of allowed to write prose like that and you do it beautifully. its honest, erotic and gross. love it.
--mp
11/06 |
Being the owner of a middle-aged cock which, on a bad day, might answer to the description of the randy old Writer's, I was slightly depressed by this story. But I did think it was very well written - which, I hope, will be some compensation for Emily.
If I ever get lucky with a sexy young chick on the basis that I might help her career, I promise to lick rather than expect to be sucked.
--CB
09/20 |
This was a really fabulous story. I don't really have the words to describe it. The imagery was fantastic. And it was real...and very very honest.
--ZW
09/18 |
How does she know what happened to me at Bread Loaf this summer!?
--B.L.
09/18 |
beautifully written. funny. painful. too smart for this site.
--lo
09/14 |
This writer is fearless and precise. The two sex scenes are rendered with a complex blend of humor and horror. I read this as pure meta-fiction. Writers are often cursed/blessed with the condition of being acutely aware of detail. This objectivity can prevent them from living in the moment. Raboteau mines that condition here. The strange remove of the woman and the man from their physical selves in moments of strained intimacy is spot on, and the power struggle between them is compelling. The flight into poetry at the finish, signaling the birth of the young woman as a writer is absolutely magical. I look forward to reading more from her!
--A.P.
09/14 |
"Illicit" is the word of choice, not "elicit". "Apportioned into" is awkward usage at best. The narrator slips into ",was all." vernacular. White precum begs a physician's attention. A published writer of this literacy level can ill afford abandoning her editor.
--J P
09/14 |
tiresome dross with amateurish changes in POV. writing about writers is pitiful. and shouldn't it have read "cords", rather than "chords"?
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09/14 |
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