This article is lame. I wasted my time reading it trying to find something interesting but all I found was she smoked a little to much crack while stripping
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02/12 |
As an ex-gogo dancer I felt completely identified with the whole story,as I was reading it I keept thinking "Hey,this is me!!" and had a lot of fun reading it.But:are we adding a new split to "the olīcheating issue" or are we using it as an excuse to writing a funny story? In My opinion this is not a great story (thereīs too many big issues involved in a too short piece so the story ends up being confusing),but itīs a great book desperately screaming to be written soon.Please do it! I canīt wait to read it.
(pd. the lesbian scene was really great!!)
--SU
02/08 |
whew! what a relief. someone actually gets it. I agree with the last reader I don't believe the intention of this piece was to be as serious as some are trying to make it to be. lighten up, and enjoy the humor. the funniest parts of this whole essay is the fact that everyone was "marginally" famous. I loved this piece!!!!
--ms
02/05 |
I find it hard to believe that anyone is reading this essay to find out what it's like to cheat or get cheated. can that possibly be what nerve's audience is up to? this isn't therapy - it's site filled with writing. maybe the kind of insight readers are looking for isn't the kind this essay has. it does have some, though, and it comes closest when the writer talks about the hummingbird in her throat - cool image, too - but it's not the moralizing heavy insight y'all seem to be seeking. I mean, I didn't read "slap" to find out what it's like to be into hit; I wanted to hear what someone else had to say -made up or otherwise - about it.
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02/05 |
This voice of this piece is cute but the narrative way cliche. Yes, cheating is confusing. This piece, however, sheds no light on it either for the cheater or the cheated. And the periodic reference to the well-trodded territory of 'how far do you have to go before its considered cheating' are better left to silly magazines than Nerve (whose respectability, it's worth noting, is hanging by a string). Anyway, if I wanted to read inconclusory, clueless, somewhat bragging soul searching I'd go through my old journals. Yes, good writing is writing that everyone can relate to, but it's also writing that manages to put a new spin on old subjects. Which this does NOT. Especially that whole last "No Cheating" section.
It's a shame that Nerve has to have these message boards do the work that a good workshop (or editor) should.
--lisa
02/05 |
What a shallow, empty-headed little collection of excuses this piece is. I'm not sure what's sadder -- that she seems to feel it's necessary to justify in her own mind all this cheating by the device of them all being (almost) famous, or that she would actually brag about it.
The sentence, "The first time I kissed him, I cried because he didn't smell like my husband," was astounding. Doesn't she know what really made her cry was the feeling of her conscience shrivelling up and dying?
--MW
02/05 |
I really liked this piece -- I thought it was well written and just the right amount of funny and reflective.
--IMP
02/05 |
somewhere inside her little mind this character is thinking "I'm not a slut, but I play one on tv".
--jmj
02/05 |
Is the fact that every hook-up is famous meant to do something in the essay? That was my first thought, but the pieces didn't quite connect for me and I ended up just feeling like the author was trying to brag.
--MR
02/05 |
Why isn't it believable? Out west it's believable, and I'm convinced by the essence of all of it. Like the form she's using here, too; the title works, the sections connect, and for once the photo used doesn't throw me too far from the writing. Riskier, clearly, than the last piece, and that's what gets my attention. There's narrative progression here. And, again, the mix of heavy and light makes this the first real writing nerve has served up in the 'first time' issue.
--cla
02/05 |
Why are all her hook-ups models or actors? Its a bit unbelieveable.
--cc
02/05 |
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