it sucks!
--paf
05/04 |
A bit melodramatic, don't you think? I would have ended it just after the line, "You should see me with a dick in my mouth." As far as I'm concerned, everything after that, you should pardon the expression, sucks.
--mr
08/03 |
hey i have a pic that would be great for this poem my email is blackballoon05@yahoo.com
trust me you'll enjoy it!!
--ah
08/03 |
I think we all need more concretion and less abstraction MK.
--ajh
07/29 |
thanks, joe! i've wondered why i mumble so often. now that i know it's just the good lord's cock'n'balls, my mind is at rest. fun piece.
beatifically,
sjb
--sjb
07/23 |
Joe,
Brilliant. You made me blush; gave me a hard-on. Looking forward to your next...
--brh
07/22 |
Sure, I have imagined a few women I have met in bars naked, kneeling down, eyes fixed on mine as she teases, licks and sucks my cock and balls, hands massaging my buns. Explicit? Check out the sex columns in some college newpapers. One, from a UC campus, "A Five minute crash course in the art of fellatio", full of very hot advice. Three columns for women on how to give their man the best blow jobs ever, including nipple tweaking and teasing until he begs for her mouth to take him in. Another column on how to handle a huge cock, ending in a woman on top session that ends in a loud, writhing sweaty cum fest that leaves both exhausted!
--MNV
07/22 |
I seriously don't remember how I got on your mailing list, but I'm glad I did. I will send something of my own along shortly.
P. S. What does god's load taste like?
--mb
07/21 |
the dick of god - good stuff
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07/21 |
Two Words - shit sandwich
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07/21 |
JOE EVERYONE LOVES DICK'S IN THERE MOUTHS AND IF THEY DON'T THEN THEY SHOULD......YOUR COUSIN JESSE"THE DICK LOVER"
--JT2
07/20 |
Load of bollocks.
--ELM
07/20 |
check out WILHELM FREDDY - Danish surealist whose famous painting of dick in/near mouth was the shit in the day
--vf
07/20 |
The wonderful thing is the concretion of the abstraction. Seems like some people are missing that-- the humor of the concrete's power to dwarf the abstract. Your life, that is, actually happens, in noise and muscle, and the rest of it, whether casual or not, IS a flight of "philosophical" fancy. The revelation of this condition is the genius of the piece.
--MK
07/18 |
Well. The last part was kind of way off...
Sorry my poor grammar.
--tt
07/18 |
the last paragraph doesn't fit. you should have talked more about the punk-rock junky girl.
--tm
07/18 |
Huh? Not so great.
--BH
07/17 |
You totally went to shit with the last paragraph.
--twa
07/17 |
i like your piece a lot until the last paragraph, but your transition there doesn't make sense to me. the god's dick in your mouth thing seems to go against what youre arguing in the preceding paragraphs. if we always already have symboic/theological dicks in our mouths, then why do the portraits on the wall lack serenity or truth, since it the dick in the mouth that endows one with this kind of aura? i don't know, the whole poetic/philosophical flight of the last paragraph just strikes me as extraneous, tonally misplaced, and conceptually underdeveloped. also, you use the subjunctive at one point, but fail to conjugate the verb "to be" accordingly. but all in all, i like your ideas.
--gm
07/17 |
When someone literally has a dick in their mouth, their nose distorts into a rather piggish splay of nostrils; often the fellater's eyes are slightly crossed as well...not very pretty. Truman Capote wrote that nothing firms the jaw like cocksucking; perhaps lantern jaws evolve from that specific nurturing.
your philosophy regarding life and death as the presence and absence of a dick in one's mouth was wonderful.
--bw
07/17 |
I once had occasion to hear a live reading of a more specific version of this piece. I must say this new, revised version postulates nicely a more universal theory that I once thought only applied to a certain Department and a certain Mediocrity.
--BJB
07/16 |
Feh.
--IK
07/16 |
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