I agree completely with the first comment. Okay, writers can miss the boat. It happens. That's what editors are for. So my question -- where was the editor?
Was this a naturewalk or a study in human behavior? I don't care about "the sun filtering through the trees" or the wind blowing through his sweater. I was more interested in WHY the girll believed him, and what did he persuade her to believe? The interaction between the two people was the important point of this store-or should have been.
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I must be missing the point. Why bother?
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I couldn't grasp any substance in this study.
I agree completely with the first comment. Okay, writers can miss the boat. It happens. That's what editors are for. So my question -- where was the editor?
Was this a naturewalk or a study in human behavior? I don't care about "the sun filtering through the trees" or the wind blowing through his sweater. I was more interested in WHY the girll believed him, and what did he persuade her to believe? The interaction between the two people was the important point of this store-or should have been.
Missed the boat here.