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You had drawn all over my body in pen In the morning when we woke, I worried for my body's carbon imprints words eyes on the dimples of my back, stitches all mirrored in slightly smudged blue In those days I was the monster to your Frankenstein. The sheets no doubt have been cleaned and the marks And now I am my own monster, left to torment become their own experiments, how in the end |
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Commentarium (6 Comments)
the second one is better.
I really enjoyed these two poems. I read Nerve's poetry section regularly because I think it's some of the most original and interesting poetry being published. But these two are easily among the best. The sentiment in "Tattoos" was well taken, but "Physics" was even better--clever, and funny, with excellent imagery. Thank you very much.
tattoos not as much, though the imagery was superb. i loved "physics." it was a ramble that kept going and going and i never got tired of it. the dr. seuss-y ending was a wonderful tie-up. i'd like some more.
physics is good, a real train journey of a poem with everything (or nearly) in it. Some may know Oliver Reynolds "Oslo Tram" based on a similar idea except that Reynolds (in a dream) *is* the tram and his girlfriend gets on and so on. Wayward and brilliant.
i really enjoyed this piece alot...the images your words created were fantastic and the last line was nothing but truth. naked truth...bare and vulnerable. excellent work.
What can I say. I like it. Actually, I love it, and this is no small feat. The rhyme, the cadence, the humor, the intellect. Wanna be my friend?
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