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July 10, 2002
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First Love
Quick, in the closet, she said.
Walter Gray is coming home.
I knelt among her calf-high boots
with my eye in the keyhole.
They undressed each other
and made slow love.
In a window behind them
snow fell and a pigeon
preened on a cornice.
I shivered with love.
Afterwards
they shared a cigarette
and Walter spoke of Khe Sanh,
the majesty of tracer fire
like the Aurora Borealis.
At dusk they roused themselves.
She took a dancer's step
toward me, then veered
and found mules under the bed,
a robe in the bathroom.
Walter's voice hardened.
It's dark. I'm hungry.
They were gone.
I wriggled into my pants
and took my first drag
on a butt still wet
from both their mouths.
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D. Nurkse and Nerve.com
Commentarium (16 Comments)
These are wonderfully rich poems, full of meaning and showing that "less is more". I enjoyed them all and found myself amazed at the clever choice of words and the beauty with which they were used. The true art of poetry.
i like this one alot
So unpretentious compared to most Nerve offerings. Understated but powerful and honest. Also erotic.
I did enjoy the poems, but I must say I've written sexier poems. Which, consequently, have been rejected by Nerve. Am I bitter? Just a little.
This stuff sucks
"smelled like Ohio?"
I could write better
in an unlit room, with no light!
There's no romance in any of this
Yuk!
yep...4 excellent poems...hats off to you!!!!
very honest, very real, puts all of us wannabe poets to shame
wonderful imagery.
I could hear you saying these poems in my chest, like when the bass drums go by in a parade. Wow. When will there be more?
Not everyone will like all that you write.
so write for you!!
From
one poet to another....
i read all four pieces posted on nerve...they were all delicious...vibrant, alive, breathing almost...nice read...peace n love...jewels
good
I really loved these poems. I was hoping it was a published author so I maybe could go out and pick up more to read. I just found them lovely and romantic and poetic, with a definite atmospheric element to them.
nice work.
sg
this is my first time reading the poems on this newly discovered (by me) nerve site. i was afraid of finding bad poetry so delayed clicking there.
surprise.
this D. person (male, female?) is a very good poet. very gifted, concise work. will look for a book by D. Nurkse.
and dare i say this poetry reminds me of my own? i think i'll submit.
I appreciate the succinct.
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