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with good intentions. A man with an olive on a toothpick is a man with options, a man with several moments to decide what he wants from his garnish. The pleasure of licking out the pimento, or the entire olive between his teeth? This sort of thing I might get to thinking after too many umbrellas have lost their novelty behind my ear. After too many tongues have followed suit.
Or maybe it was the way I phrased it: do you think you could fuck me, now? Do you think, as though he hadn't considered it yet. You could, as though maybe he couldn't. Fuck me, now, as though it were a time-sensitive issue. It could've been me. I could've asked if he thought he could fuck someone. Or maybe it was you. Maybe I should've asked if there were a fuck in the air, if a fuck was about to take place, if someone, somewhere, at some point that night was going to get what she had come for.
when you call. Through a thousand miles of cable, your wet voice is coming to get me. I say I'm wearing yellow cotton panties with weak elastic and a Virginia is for Lovers T-shirt, which is true. I say, I'm thinking about your really great cock, which is not true I'm thinking about your really great apartment, right on the beach. I say, sure I remember that time I flashed you in a club on 10th, drunk on Tequila, but was I? I say, go ahead, baby, I'm ready, and what I mean is, prepared. A bird sounds outside the window. Birds, so lucky, flying around, calling to each other without any pretense of protection. Is it dangerous? If bird's bones are hollow, does it follow that so are their hearts?
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Commentarium (14 Comments)
Very nicely written.. A good juxtaposition of ideas and thoughts that took me on a journey.
keep the good work up :)
I think that was great and clever.
snore
What great lines - "tissue over the receiver," birds with hollow bones - thank you for the short and the sweet of it; a great way to start the day.
short and sweet...the imagery captured by your use of lanuage in enviable.
i think im in love
Great. Just great. Deep feelings + punk is a wonderful mixture.
I'm *sure* I'm in love! Thank you for your wonderful wordcraft, Danielle. Call me.
"For safer sex, I put a tissue over the receiver
when you call."
That line is a total keeper!
Nice. Good imagery. Fleeting, the way I see things in my mind's eye.
Groove, rhythm, choice cadence!
Very good .
There is a remarkable humor at first reading these three sections... each is independent and can stand on its own. With further reading though, I find some of the devices, such as voice/character and transitioning is seemingly natural and not forced. Pafunda's voice is charming, deliberately devious, and so casual it hardly seems like trying. Yet, only with a practiced hand and/or utter natural talent can a writer achieve both a poetic gravity and lightheartedness all in a few lines. I am this coming year's editor for the MOSAIC, one of the longest running literary publications in California. Im Albacetefire, for more information. I would love to communicate with Danielle, as she would be a featured writer.
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